Sunday, April 19, 2009

Final Essay

Topic: Exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding.

Kitty Wang

____Exploration-a word that contains uncounted histories of explorers in the world. It is so important for a country which wants to be strong. To explore is a good way to develop countries because it can help people find new lands and matters for their countries. Because each object has its two sides, exploration also can make bad matters happen. Hence, exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding because of the strange of people who explored the native people homeland, the different cultures and explorers who wanted to plunder the native people's wealth.
____Exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding because of the strange to the native people who explored their homeland. It is so impolite to enter other people's home without any permission. When the native people saw the explorers at fist time, they would be afraid and strange to look at them and talk to them. They wouldn't regard them as their friends, even they would thought that they were aggressors who wanted to encroach their land. They may treated them as their enemies and argued with the explorers so that they would make a lot of trouble. So, it was easy to make conflict and misunderstanding by the strange to the native people by explorers.
____The different cultures between two different places could also cause conflict misunderstanding. Because different people have different languages, customs and life styles, they would have obstructions in communication and dissimilar ideas in some affairs. It was hard to let their thoughts and opinions be the same. Sometimes, people's words may be understand in inaccurate ways by the native people so that they would have conflict. In addition, something explorers could do, but the native people may think the affairs explorers did were wrong and wild. If they have different thoughts in some affairs, it could lead them to get misunderstanding. As a result, different cultures was a way to make conflict.
____The last point is the exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding because the explorers want to plunder the native people's wealth. Explorers who went to explore all wanted to find riches for their countries to develop fast. When the explorers arrived in lands, they wanted get riches from it to their countries. It was so savage to plunder the native people's wealth and areas that the native people would fight with them to protect their homeland. It was so easy to exasperate the native people in this way because the homeland was so important for them. In short, plundering the native people's wealth would break the relationship between them and conflicts would come out.
____Therefore, exploration can create conflict and misunderstanding because the strange to the native people by the explorers, different cultures and explorers who wanted to plunder the native people's wealth. Though explorers could find new lands and matters, they would also let trouble come out. More and more people in the world want to explore now, but it is major for people to thinking about exploring because of its two sides: succeed and fail. If people get success, they can do great deeds. If they fail, they won't get anything and will make conflicts and misunderstanding. For this reason, exploration is a positive way to know the world, but it is also a bad way that can cause trouble.

2 comments:

  1. Focus - 4/4
    Usage - 3/4
    Organization - 4/4
    Style - 3/4 (try to use higher-level words)
    Instead of "good" use "positive"
    Content - 4/4


    You have some very interesting ideas about exploration. Congratulations! You look like you understand the topic. You have some little mistakes in your essay but at least you used your own words.

    18/20 x 2 - 36/40

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  2. Thank you, Ms.Chan.
    I will correct my mistakes.
    :P

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