Sunday, March 29, 2009

Exploration Essay

Kitty Wang
Exploration is Important for Countries
____From the ancient times, there have been uncounted people go to explore in the world. Some of them may need to save problems their countries face, some of them may want to find new island or new technologies to develop their countries. There isn't just one way to explore. For example, space, oil and island all have been explored by humans. For this reason, exploration is very important for countries because it can find innovation, communicate different cultures and advance countries' friendships.
____The first of the importance of exploration is it can find innovation for their countries. Innovation is a new idea, method, or invention that can make a country get new technologies to make progress. Finding innovation is good for people's countries. Taking innovation from a place is a good idea of exploration because it can be a way to produce new products for the people to use. For example, John Cabot-a voyager was asked to explore to Asia in the past. He found a new land-"Newfoundland" and took a lot of codfish there to his country. Codfish was new to Cabot and his country, they can eat them and raise them so that they can have enough codfish to eat and sell them to bring money in. It was an outstanding deed of him to find Newfoundland because they can use that land and take matters from it. Thus, finding innovation is good for countries to develop fast.
Communicating different cultures with people is the second major point of the importance of exploration. It's a good way to know more about other countries. Different places have different cultures, such as clothes, languages and customs. ____Communicating with people can make people learn much knowledge and more about other islands. Exploration can do this to make your countries better. For instance, long ago, there was an explorer-Jacques Cartier going to explore. He arrived in Canada and talked with native people. They knew their clothes made from, their languages and their customs. They learned about them a lot so that they found native people's cultures were different from theirs. Cartier used their knives to trade native people's fur. They took dissimilar cultures from native people to their country. A country which has different cultures can become many-faceted. It will be a polyglot country so that people can communicate with each other easily. In short, cultures' communications is a major point for a country's development.
____The last point of exploration's importance is it can advance countries' friendships. Many countries' relations are not good so that they may have wars. Good relationships have benefits in countries' futures. Exploration is an approach to build a harmonious relation between two countries. For example, oil plays an important role in economy, but now many countries lack it. There are many countries sending people to explore for it. If a country finds oil in another country, the latter may will help the former so that the relation between them will be friendly. They can have economic communications and carry on some commercial activities. This can not only develop countries, but also make their friendship better. So, exploration has major effects on countries' friendships and contacts.
____Therefore, exploration plays an important part in countries' advance because it can find innovation, communicate different cultures and accelerate countries' friendships. According to the examples, exploration is really very important for countries. Exploration has done a lot of great feats in the world. It is a good idea to be used for countries' wonderful futures. Actually, exploration is not only significant for countries, but also beneficial for humans and the world. Hence, exploration is so important that can help humans have better lives and live in a better world.

1 comment:

  1. Focus - 4/4
    You have a very clear point of view. It is related to the topic and it is very well-written.

    Organization - 4/4
    Your body paragraphs are very logical. The conclusion is very thoughtful and insightful. Very

    Content - 4/4
    Very good development of ideas. You really took the time to use your own words.

    Usage 3.5/4
    You have a generally accurate use of your words.

    Style 3.5/4
    Try to use different ways to begin your sentences. try to use higher level vocabulary words in your writing. Instead of "good", you can use "positive".

    Overall, a very good essay. Congratulations Kitty! Thank you for trying your best all the time! I really think you have so much potential!

    19/20 x2 = 38/40

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